Forget Olive, I want noodes of the Brazilian.
That doesn't seem done. Maybe I'm simple and just need a "The End" at the end of a story this long. Nothing really seemed completely finished though - you're "moving on" with life etc. but still dwelling on the past. It seems a lot like you're waiting until you have your next Olive dose and then you'll put another update in here.
Not trying to hate - just saying your story sounds incomplete. It's either because you're not done typing (understandable) or because it's still on-going.
Syntax you're not off to a great start here you fucking faggot. You alienate your audience when you say something like "I don't owe you fucknuts anything"
You were the one crying to get this thread out of the archives dumbass.